Homework due September 5th
Due to the Labor Day Holiday, this assignment is due on Tuesday September 6th at 9:00am
Part 1: Log into TownSend Press and complete the following activities from the book Building Vocabulary Skills:
Chapter 1
· Vocabulary in Context
· Matching Words with Definitions
· Sentence Check 1
· Sentence Check 2
· Final Check
Part 2: This is a writing assignment where you will include at least 3 of the vocabulary words from chapter 1. Your paragraph should be at least 5 sentences long. Pay attention to grammar, punctuation, and overall clarity. At the bottom of your paragraph, please tell me your name which 3 words you used.
Role – School director
Audience – Parents of high school students
Format – Letter
Topic – Tell parents that the teenagers in your high school need to stop watching violent TV shows and movies.
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ReplyDeleteI noticed that teenagers in our class have been watching TV programs recently. They told me some anecdotes from TV programs which they have watched. I acknowledge that most of those stories are very impressive meanwhile some of them are kind of violent. Teenagers are impacted by what they are watching. This impaction would last for a lifetime. Parents should take the responsibility to keep their kids away from violent TV shows and keep their media environment clean.
ReplyDeleteWord: anecdote -acknowledge-appreciate
DeleteI noticed that teenagers in our class have been watching TV programs recently. They told me some anecdotes from TV programs which they have watched. I acknowledge that most of those stories are very impressive meanwhile some of them are kind of violent. Teenagers are impacted by what they are watching. This impaction would last for a lifetime. Parents should take the responsibility to keep their kids away from violent TV shows. It would be appropriate to keep their media environment clean.
To SLJH Parents/Guardians:
DeleteAs the new school year starts, we have to acknowledge the problems of drastic media that students are exposed to. We advise parents/guardians to avert or decrease the screen time of your students. Instead of compelling students to get on social media, advising an alternative media resources can be a better option.
We appreciate your support in this matter,
SLJH Student Life Coordinator Team
Amy Chang
Acknowledge/drastic/Compel/Alternative
Student Robin
DeleteTownSend Press 46/50
Vocabulary 30/30 – correctly used all 3 words. The third word was “appropriate” not “appreciate”.
Length (5+ sentences) 10/10
Grammar, punctuation & clarity 10 /10
Comments:
Hello Robin! Thank you for submitting your work. You do have an error in the way you used the word “impaction”. The correct form of the word is “impact”. Not to worry, this wasn’t one of the vocabulary words for the week. Well done today! Grade: 96%
Student Amy
DeleteTownSend Press 49/50
Vocabulary 30/30
Length (5+ sentences) 10/10
Grammar, punctuation & clarity 10/10
Comments: Excellent work Amy! You’d make a fantastic principal! Grade: 99%
Dear Parents,
ReplyDeleteI want to talk about something important. Some students in our high school watch shows and movies with violence. This worries us because it might affect how they act. I acknowledge everyone can choose what to watch, but we need to think about what might influence them. don’t want to compel all the students to comply what we said, but I think there is an alternative way to solve the problem, which is to work together.
I would like to candidly ask all the parents to help their students choose the appropriate programs to watch, in order to avert bad things happen. I
Sincerely,
Jolene Liu
School Director
word: acknowledge compel comply alternative candidly avert
Student Jolene
DeleteTownSend Press 48 /50
Vocabulary 30/30 (review the use of comply)
Length (5+ sentences) 10 /10
Grammar, punctuation & clarity 10/10
Comments:
Well done Jolene! I am happy to see you attempted to use 6 vocabulary words when you were only required to use 3. There are two small errors in your work. The word “comply” often requires the preposition “with” to come after it. It was missing in your paragraph. Then in the last sentence, it should be: avert bad things from happening. Grade: 98%
Dear Parents,
ReplyDeleteI hope this letter finds you well. As the school director, it is my responsibility to address matters that impact the well-being and development of our students candidly and appropriately. Today, I would like to acknowledge a concern that affects many teenagers in our high school – the prevalence of violent TV shows and movies in their entertainment choices. I'd like to share a brief anecdote to illustrate the drastic impact such content can have on our impressionable young minds. Recently, I had a conversation with one of our students who recounted imitating a violent scene from a movie, resulting in a minor injury.
Sincerely,
Mergen Atabayev
School Director
Used words:
1)candid; 2) appropriate; 3) acknowledge; 4) anecdote; 5) drastic;
Student Mergen
DeleteTownSend Press 49 /50
Vocabulary 30 /30
Length (5+ sentences) 10/10
Grammar, punctuation & clarity 10 /10
Comments: Very impressive vocabulary Mergen! You even used “affect” correctly, which many student mistake with “effect”. The only thing I would do to improve this paragraph is to add an ending. After you shared the anecdote, I was excepting at least one more sentence to conclude the message to the parents. Grade: 99%
Dear Parents,
ReplyDeleteI want to talk candidly about a pressing issue: our high school students watching violent TV shows and movies. This is concerning, and I've heard an anecdote of a student getting hurt while trying to copy a violent scene. To avert such incidents, I urge parents to consider alternative, age-appropriate entertainment options. Let's work together to ensure a safer environment for our students' well-being and development.
Sincerely,
Merjen Atabayeva
School director
Used words:
1)candid;2)anecdote;3)avert;4)alternative;
Student Merjen
DeleteTownSend Press 19 /50 – You didn’t do very well in TownSend Press. This is worth half of your homework grade. Next time, if you get less than 70% in a TownSend Press activity, just do it a second time!
Vocabulary 30 /30
Length (5+ sentences) 10 /10
Grammar, punctuation & clarity 10 /10
Comments: A very well written paragraph! Unfortunately, your TownSend Press grade brought down your final grade. Grade: 69%
Dear Parents,
ReplyDeleteI want to talk about something important. We need to stop extensive viewing of television violence by teenagers which is causing greater aggressiveness. Sometimes, watching a single violent program can even increase aggressiveness. Teenagers who view shows in which violence is very realistic, frequently repeated or unpunished, are more likely to imitate what they see. So we have to take precautions that teenagers needed diversion to informative TV shows and movies.
Sincerely,
Shabana
School Director
Used words:
1)aggressiveness; 2) extensive; 3) diversion; 4) imitate; 5) precautions
Student Shabana
DeleteTownSend Press 50 /50 – well done! You were the only student to score 100% in TownSend Press this week.
Vocabulary 0/30 – none of the vocabulary words are from unit 1
Length (5+ sentences) 10/10
Grammar, punctuation & clarity 10/10
Comments: Hello Shabana! I’m sorry to say that you lost a lot of points for not selecting words from unit 1. If you would like to resubmit this assignment with the correct words, please send me an email. Grade: 70%
Hello parents,
ReplyDeleteI hope this email will finds you well. Just wanted to acknowledge all the parents and their hard work of the upbringing of thier kids. I would like to bring in notice about the aggressive behavior of some kids in school while having a conversation we came to a conclusion that watching too
Much of voilence in tv Is getting impact on kid’s aggressive behavior. So as a parents we must take a better alternative to divert our kids from
Watching those voilence and getting negative impact on them
Hope that all parents should talk to thier respective kids and help to make their future bright.
Thanks regards
Principal
Student Tarana
DeleteTownSend Press 33/50 – Your TownSend Press grade was not very good. Next time, please redo the activities you get a low grade in.
Vocabulary 20/30 – only saw 2 vocabulary words.
Length (5+ sentences) 8/10 - I only saw 4 periods. This means, you only wrote 4 sentences.
Grammar, punctuation & clarity 6 /10 – Didn’t take points off for the first 3 errors, but I did for all the ones following that.
Comments:
Hi Tarana,
Next time you complete this assignment, please write the vocabulary words that you included at the bottom of the paragraph. I only found the words acknowledge and alternative. They were both used correctly. I did find a few errors in other parts of the paragraph. To start off, there are some weird spaces in the middle. I’m not sure if this was a typing error or how it happened. You also have the following errors:
- Instead of saying “email will finds you” we should say “email finds you”
- Instead of saying “bring in notice about the aggressive” we should say “bring to notice the aggressive”.
- The sentence “while having a conversation…” should have started with a capital letter. There should have also been a period before it. This sentence is also a bit unclear as I cannot tell who you are having a conversation with.
- Instead of saying “is getting impact” we should say “is impacting”
- “Watching” should not have a capital letter as it should be part of the same sentence.
- Instead of saying “those violence” we should say “those violent tv shows”.
- No need to say “hope” and “should” in the same sentence as it changes the meaning. Grade: 67%
Dear Parents,
ReplyDeleteI would like to inform you about the students at are campus are doing dangerous and violent stunts which has made some students get injured. When we had a conversation with the performing students and asked them why they did those stunts they said, they were recreating some violent movie stunts. I acknowledge that they have the right to watch what they want, but lets help them avert to more informative movies they can watch, but if this behavior continues we will take drastic steps to stop this from happening.
Thank you
Shahnaz Maknojiya
(School director)
Three words used
- Acknowledge
- Avert
- Drastic
Student Shanaz
DeleteTownSend Press 39/50 - You are allowed to retake the townsend press activities when you do not do well in them.
Vocabulary 30/30
Length (5+ sentences) 6/10 – I only saw 3 periods. This means you only wrote 3 sentences.
Grammar, punctuation & clarity 8/10 – didn’t take points off for the first 3 grammar errors.
Comments: Hi Shanaz,
The 3 vocabulary words were used correctly. I saw some minor errors in the paragraph:
- You used the word “are” instead of “our” in the first sentence. I think this was just a typo.
- The same sentence has the word “has” while it should use the word “have” as the noun, stunts, is plural.
- Instead of saying “made some students get injures”, you can say “have injured students”.
- The comma in the second sentence should be after the words “did those stunts”.
- At the end, you should have a period after the words “they can watch”. The next sentence should start with the word “If”. No need to say “but if” Grade: 83%
Hello team,
ReplyDeleteThis mail is being written on behalf of the staff council regarding students excessive usage of phones which is leading them to watch inappropriate tv shows and movies. The students now a days watching violent shows which might not comply with their behavior and learning.
So I sincerely request the parents to take interest in their kids habits and inculcate good habits.
Student Saniya
DeleteTownSend Press 39 /50 – You are allowed to retake the townsend press activities when you do not do well in them.
Vocabulary 20 /30 – only found 2 words
Length (5+ sentences) 6/10 – only wrote 3 sentences
Grammar, punctuation & clarity 10 /10 – I start taking points off after the third error.
Comments: Saniya, next time you submit an assignment on BlogSpot please tell me which vocabulary words you used at the bottom of your paragraph. The vocabulary words I found were: appropriate, comply. Both were used correctly.
There was one error in the second sentence. It says “students now a days watching”. This is missing the word “are”. Also, we put “now a days” together to form one word: nowadays.
Make sure to write at least 5 sentences next time. Grade: 75%
Student Safina
ReplyDeleteTownSend Press 44 /50
Vocabulary 0/30 – these words are not from unit 1. Where did you find them?
Length (5+ sentences) 10/10
Grammar, punctuation & clarity 10 /10
Comments: Hi Safina,
You had some errors with the vocabulary words. “precautions” was the only one used correctly. However, none of the words you selected are from unit 1. Therefore I cannot give you any points for it. If you would like to rewrite the paragraph, send me an email. Grade: 64%